A little short; it didn't really sastify my thirst for more explanation. But it still is an interesting series at that. You're taking plenty of liberties with the original, I see.
Sure, race the lines
growing from the roadsides; you'll go nowhere.
This night is white painted squares
tracing back fast
behind, like paper
animations—aren't you just
a perfect outline of lead.
Aren't you just
this dead, dusty angel
riding shotgun; going somewhere
not safe, not to the home you knew.
That place...
